Draft Script – Audiovisual script for Assignment 2 Video News Release
|[VO – FOOTAGE OF MP TALKING TO ROAD WORKERS ON YEPPOON ROAD]||NARRATOR: Newly elected Member for Keppel, Monica Mallory, is promising to improve the quality and make our Queensland roads safer. With two crashes in one hour occurring on the Rockhampton to Yeppoon road at the end of April, the MP is saying ‘enough is enough.’|
|[GRAB]||MONICA MALLORY, MEMBER FOR KEPPEL: “Something needs to be done about the dangerous conditions on Queensland roads – especially what I have seen in the Keppel area alone – and I plan on doing just that.”|
|[VO – ROADSIDE FOOTAGE OF CARS TRAVELLING ON YEPPOON ROAD]
[VO – FOOTAGE OF TRAFFIC BACKED-UP DUE TO CAR ACCIDENT]
|NARRATOR: Ms Mallory is already seeking funding for the resurfacing of the entire Rockhampton to Yeppoon road and the duplication of the road into four lanes.
The MP believes that the four-lane road will reduce the likelihood of car-related accidents as well as preventing closures in the event an accident does occur.
|[GRAB]||MONICA MALLORY: “Quite frankly, one fatality is one too many. The number of commuters from Rockhampton to Yeppoon is too high to not have safe roads. Road safety is our number one priority at this stage.”|
|[VO – FOOTAGE OF MP TALKING WITH REGULAR COMMUTERS]||NARRATOR: Ms Mallory reveals that she has spoken with many citizens of Rockhampton and Yeppoon who have all admitted to recognising this problem.|
|[GRAB]||ANONYMOUS: FREQUENT ROCKHAMPTON TO YEPPOON TRAVELLER: “It is good to finally see a Member addressing one of the biggest issues in our region. I am a victim and a witness to far too many near-misses every day on my way to work.”|
Deliver the Script
Listen to the recording here!
Ames (2016) suggests that it is ‘…important to write to support the vision, rather than finding vision to support the writing when writing a news story.’ With this in mind, I envisioned what my video news release would look like if it were to air on television. I referred to what I see on the news and began writing to meet this structure. At this stage after listening back to my recording, I have noticed I need to improve on my overall delivery of the script. I need to decipher between each ‘speaker’ so listeners can clearly tell who is the narrator, the MP, and members of the public. I also need to add more statistics and data into my script to make my information more credible.
After reviewing my blog generally, I am confident that all activities have been successfully completed, I have covered the relevant topics for each week, and I have included all references and written them correctly. I have checked grammar, spelling and punctuation, and am happy with the layout of my blog.
Over the course of the term (nine weeks), blog posts for Speech and Script have been completed weekly. These blog posts have consisted of an array of activities that have constituted a complete workbook. These tasks have involved focus on; voice, writing, delivery, recording, visual media, reading, types of talk, and of course, speech and script. By completing these exercises weekly, it has helped to understand the importance of planning, gain useful knowledge for future university courses and in a professional environment, and improve on time management skills.
When reflecting on all of the activities over the course of the term, some tasks were particularly more useful than others. It was found that re-recording a previously recorded news story was a beneficial task to undertake. This is because it became easier to notice improvements in the voice, where errors have been made, or where something has been done well. In week 2, it was required to review what makes a great speech (Ames 2016). This was another useful task as it provided insight into what should be in a speech to make it appealing to the audience, to successfully get a message across, as well as tips on performative techniques. Week 5’s workbook activity for institutional talk was valuable as it compared news interviews with entertainment-oriented interviews. This helped to distinguish between the two and to examine what makes them different. Finally, all activities that involved planning for assignment two were the most useful as they helped understand the requirements of the assignment and assisted in essential planning.
The University of Edinburgh (2015) suggests that essential aspects of assignment planning are; understanding what the assignment is asking, planning the time needed to complete the assignment to a high standard, prioritising, drafting, and mindmapping. As some of the blog activities required planning for the second assignment, a lot of this essential planning has already been completed. This has certainly increased the level of confidence in heading into the final assessment, as majority of the planning can assist in writing the final copy of the maiden speech and video news release. Considering a lot of performance and speaking exercises have taken place, it has also helped in boosting confidence for this aspect of the assignment. Final issues or concerns are to be addressed by continuing individual research and reading work completed by professionals for general ideas.
Muncy (2014) defines that, ‘reflective learning is the process through which students interact with and apply what they are learning to their own life and experiences.’ He adds that the desired educational outcome from blogging is indeed, reflective learning (Muncy 2014). By reflecting and writing views on particular topics each week, it has helped with the overall understanding and improvement of speaking and scripting writing. Considering quite an immense amount of discussion – in class and on forums – as well as individual research has taken place, it is inevitable that an understanding of speech and script has significantly improved. Much effort went into the tasks that required delivery, such as the piece to camera (PTC) and the recording of scripts that helped to improve talking voice and confidence in front of a camera or microphone. It is agreed that using performative techniques has helped to enhance the capabilities of good speech delivery (Ames 2016).
Effective communication is achieved by using all elements of your body and your voice to communicate your message (Ames 2016). Although these weekly workbook activities were time consuming and involved a lot of research, discussion, and thinking, it has been an exceedingly worthwhile assignment. Not only has it provided extensive amounts of useful knowledge and skills for future reference, but it has assisted in time management by keeping up to date week-by-week, and has helped to learn more about myself, how I interact, and how I can improve on how I deliver speeches or speak in a professional environment.
Ames, K 2016, COMM12033: Speech and Script Workbook Activities, CQUniversity e-courses, https://moodle.cqu.edu.au/course/view.php?id=3186
Ames, K 2016, COMM12033: Speech and Script Lesson 4: Performance: study guide, CQUniversity e-courses, https://moodle.cqu.edu.au/pluginfile.php/293232/mod_resource/content/6/COMM12033_Week4_Mod.pdf
Ames, K 2016, COMM12033: Speech and Script Lesson 9: Writing Speech – Script Writing: study guide, CQUniversity e-courses, https://moodle.cqu.edu.au/pluginfile.php/293247/mod_resource/content/3/COMM12033_Week9_Mod.pdf
Muncy, J. A. 2014, ‘Blogging for Reflection: The Use of Online Journals to Engage Students in Reflective Learning’, Marketing Education Review, vol. 24, no. 2, pp. 101-114, viewed 12 May 2016, http://eds.b.ebscohost.com.ezproxy.cqu.edu.au/eds/pdfviewer/pdfviewer?vid=1&sid=e3ad017e-e148-4c9f-9d7f-8f6ebe10b4fc%40sessionmgr104&hid=119
The University of Edinburgh (UE) 2015, Assignments: planning and drafting, 2015, viewed 13 May 2016, http://www.ed.ac.uk/institute-academic-development/postgraduate/taught/learning-resources/assignments